So I made this cover letter and thought it showed I’d be dedicated to their field and wanting to learn. While have experience and schooling in certain fields that may benefit their business. Then that I am really good with customers?

Though I showed my mom and grandma. My mom owns a photography business and my grandma used to do interviews for churches. My grandma said that it is absolutely amazing and perfect. While my mom simply just say don’t use it but literally won’t give any explanation into her thought process… so please can anyone let me know, would this be good to use for a job application or to take into the interview?

  • DaddysLittleSlut@lemmy.worldOPEnglish
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    5 months ago

    Sorry I’m not very used to asking for advice and feedback but I managed to shorten it by 500ish words

    Dear Hiring Managers,

    I am interested in the position you have open, and I am open to other opportunities as well within your business. I have experience in sales, customer service, and cleaning. I have completed Ivy Tech courses in business management, advertising/marketing, and accounting. I have also studied psychology, sociology, and developmental biology on my own. I have found that those studies help to build stronger customer relationships and create trustworthy advertisements.

    Should you require any further information, please do not hesitate to contact me at …