• OsrsNeedsF2POP
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    1 year ago

    Kk Lemmy is being weird but here you are -

    • Make it 1 page
    • Remove summary
    • Use a format that is more compressed, you have so much white-space
    • Change Skills categories - You use Git for Backend and Frontend, so the categories have overlap and don’t make much sense. Most people use Languages/Frameworks/Tools, do some variation of that
    • Good to see education at the bottom, although I’m not sure what Non-Graduate means (it sounds like you dropped out? If you didn’t drop out, definitely change the wording)

    Bulletpoints:

    • None of recent bulletpoints have “proof” that you did a good job. You kind of talk about a “result” by saying “things got better” or “things got faster”, but you don’t prove it. Your old bulletpoints (ie US Air Force) on the other hand are great
    • Add metrics - You have very few numbers in your bulletpoints. Numbers are the best way to show impact
    • Your bulletpoint formatting changed half-way through - Before you were putting the tech stack below each point, afterwards you stopped. Be consistent

    i.e. change “Led architecture design change, implemented server-driven UI framework for dynamically rendering pages, reducing development time for new content”

    To “Led architecture design change, implemented server-driven UI [with FrameworkName], reducing [page load by 50ms/page size by 80%]”

    i.e. “Facilitated agile engineering team improvement, led sessions designed to promote continued growth by creating iterative goals focused on agile engineering fluences, enhancing team’s capability to deliver value.”

    To “Facilitated agile engineering team improvement, led 12 sessions of 8 engineers to promote continued growth by creating iterative goals focused on agile engineering fluences, enhancing team’s capability to deliver value.”

    i.e. “Developed network wide security log centralization and archiving solution, ensuring log integrity for 200 GB of logs a day” - This is very good

    But still change to “Developed network wide security log centralization and archiving solution [with XYZ], ensuring log integrity for 200 GB of logs a day”

    i.e. “Administrator responsible for maintaining $2.7M Joint Worldwide Intelligence Communication Network node supporting 24/7/365 unmanned aerial vehicle operation, and Nellis Air Force base exercises” - This is great, the $2.7M shows great ownership, but you’re missing a bullet at the start (formatting)